Fire up your fiction and don’t give anybody a reason to reject your novel
by Jodie Renner
…fiction editor and author of writing guides
Have your trusted friends or beta readers told you your WIP novel is too long, confusing, or just doesn’t grab them? Here are some typical “big-picture” weaknesses to watch out for in your fiction and correct before sending it to an editor, publishing it, or pitching it to an agent.
These types of glaring gaffes in writing, pacing, plot, or structure will bog down your story and invite bad reviews, which could sink your reputation as a novelist. Fortunately, they can all be remedied at the revision and self-editing stages.
~ Overwriting. Not enough self-editing will give people a reason to reject your novel
Today’s bestselling novels are mostly between 70,000 and 90,000 words long. Unless you’re an absolutely brilliant writer, and experts in the business have told you so, if your manuscript is over 95,000 words long, it definitely needs tightening up.
Cut way back on explanations and descriptions, and trim down long, convoluted sentences to their essence. Make every word count.
~ Meandering writing – the main story question / problem is fuzzy or buried.
What’s the protagonist’s main goal and fear, and his/her main problem? This should be obvious early on and be the overriding driving force behind your whole story. Don’t let it get lost in meandering writing, too much backstory, frequent info dumps, too many characters, too many subplots, and unrelated plot details.
~ One unrelated thing after another happens.
Don’t get caught up in “and then, and then, and then,” with a bunch of sub-stories or episodes that aren’t related to each other and don’t directly tie in with the main plot problem and story question.
Your events and scenes need to be connected by cause and effect. Each scene should impact the following scenes and complicate future events.
~ Way too much going on.
A common problem is too many characters crowding the scenes, and readers getting confused and frustrated trying to remember who’s who. Or maybe you have too many subplots that veer off in different directions and confuse the issue. Or a convoluted story where many issues or subplots don’t tie in with the main character and his or her overarching problem.
~ The main character is flat, unsympathetic, predictable, or wishy-washy.
Readers want a protagonist they can bond with, worry about, and root for – and a character who’s worthy of their worry. Create a lead character who is smart, likeable, and charismatic, but with inner conflict, a few flaws, some baggage, and maybe a past that’s haunting them.
~ A thin plot
This is where the premise / story line is obscure, with all kinds of unrelated happenings and way too much yak-yak dialogue that doesn’t have enough tension, conflict, or purpose.
Also, often the issues and stakes aren’t serious enough. Anything that doesn’t directly relate to your major story problem, develop your characters, or drive the story forward should be cut.
~ A predictable story line
Write in some twists, surprises, reversals. When a character has to make a decision or her actions cause repercussions, brainstorm for all possible consequences and choose one that readers won’t be expecting. Add in reversals here and there that force a change in goals, actions, reactions, or consequences.
~ Flat scenes
When scenes are boring, it’s because there’s not enough conflict, tension, suspense, and intrigue. Make sure every page has characters interacting, with action, dialogue, conflict, and tension.
Every scene needs a focal point or a “hot spot” – its own mini-climax. Also, be sure to start scenes late and end early. And don’t tie everything up with a neat little bow at the end of the scene or chapter. End with the protagonist in more trouble (most of the time), or with a cliffhanger.
~ La-la land
Everybody’s getting along so well. What’s wrong with that? It’s great in real life, but in fiction it’s the kiss of death. Why? Because it’s boring. Conflict is what drives fiction forward and keeps readers turning the pages.
~ Overkill: Nonstop action
Unrelenting chases, explosions, and violence, with a constant break-neck pace, can numb readers. Vary your pacing and write in some quieter moments here and there for variety and breathing space between high-action scenes.
~ Plot holes
Watch for those actions, events, character reactions, and other details that just don’t make sense for one reason or another. Look for any inconsistencies, illogical details, or discrepancies. Make sure all your story questions are answered at some point.
These types of gaffes are often difficult for the author to see, so this is where your critique group, beta readers, or editor can be invaluable, especially if you specifically ask them to be sure to flag anything that doesn’t make sense for any reason.
~ A sagging middle
It’s easy to get bogged down in the middle and turn it into a muddle. If you’re losing interest or inspiration, go back to where the story really grabbed you, and consider what came between that and the scene you’re at now.
Can you oomph up, change, or delete any of the scenes in between?
~ No noticeable character arc
With the exception of action-adventure or military stories, most compelling novels show the main character undergoing change, caused by the adversity they’ve gone through and the resources they had to pull out of themselves to overcome adversity. They’ve developed and matured, and are now more confident and hopefully happier, which is satisfying to readers.
~ An unsatisfying ending
This can be caused by a number of factors, such as:
- – The protagonist succeeds through coincidence, an Act of God, or help from a minor character. He should attain his goal through his own resourcefulness, cleverness, determination, courage, and inner strength.
- – The ending is tragic, and the protagonist is unhappy. Unsatisfying and disappointing. Leave that for literary fiction. Or if you must make her lose or suffer in one way, make her win/gain in another way.
- – The ending is too predictable. Brainstorm for possible ways to add a surprise twist at the end.
- – Logic flaws – the ending doesn’t really make sense given the details supplied earlier.
- – Things wrap up too suddenly. Don’t be in a hurry to finish your story – make sure all the story questions are addressed and all the elements of the ending make sense.
- – Things dribbling on for too long after the resolution. Know when to stop.
For more on how to write a satisfying ending, see Anne’s post on do’s and don’t for writing a final chapter and give people no reason to reject your novel.
To remedy these kinds of gaffes, be sure to enlist some savvy beta readers who read popular novels in your genre. Then, after you’ve considered their suggestions and revised accordingly, contact a well-respected freelance editor to go over your manuscript.
For more tips with examples for writing engaging fiction, see Jodie Renner’s Editor’s Guides to Writing Compelling Fiction, Writing a Killer Thriller, Fire up Your Fiction, and Captivate Your Readers (links below).
by Jodie Renner February 9th 2020
What about you, scriveners? Do you think you’ve ever given readers any of these reasons to reject your novel? What makes you give up on a book you’re reading?
Jodie Renner is a freelance fiction editor and the award-winning author of three craft-of-writing guides in her series An Editor’s Guide to Writing Compelling Fiction: FIRE UP YOUR FICTION, CAPTIVATE YOUR READERS, and WRITING A KILLER THRILLER, as well as two clickable time-saving e-resources, QUICK CLICKS: Spelling List and QUICK CLICKS: Word Usage.
She has also organized two anthologies for charity: VOICES FROM THE VALLEYS – Stories and Poems about Life in BC’s Interior, and CHILDHOOD REGAINED – Stories of Hope for Asian Child Workers. Website: www.JodieRenner.com; blog; Facebook. Amazon Author Page.
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